What do you seek? I see so many, often women, seeking to find something to make them special, or beautiful. We so often feel 'too much' and 'not enough' all at the same time... Real Toads this week is a challenge to celebrate the feminine, and whilst it is true that many of us struggle with the concepts in my poem, regardless of gender, I do wish to speak particularly to the ladies amongst us with this one... Please read here and then check out the other poets at Real Toadshttp://withrealtoads.blogspot.ca/ too.
Linking to dVerse to share my take on those concepts, so please read here and then read more at my favourite pub. :D
The Seeker
She sees herself as a complex web of contradictions
desperate to dance beyond the mundane
seeing deeper, hearing whispered rhythms
woven through life’s song
She longs to walk the fringe of an aurora
Lit with their fire, wordlessly enraptured,
until she becomes sheer colour
woven beyond sight’s spectrum
She fears to share her most intricate thoughts
holding them close, cradled like newborn heads
as though they would snap-
woven on words’ unsteadiness,
If only she knew
the precious light she’s looking for
is not hidden in the moon’s insipid blotches
woven in the world’s earthbound echoes
It is shimmering there, unfurling in her heart.
26 comments:
Yes!Yes! Yes! Oh you got this! Yes!
nice....the first couple stanzas could have been me you know...and love the light unfurling in her heart...
Yes, keep that light burning bright, baby! It's beautiful. Great poem.
I really liked the third stanza as it creates imagery and thus allows you to feel the words.
Many have said what you're trying to say here - that the magic, the strength, the courage is all inside you
i like...often we look in the wrong places..tracing shades..if she only could see..nicely penned..
True on so many levels. Introspection can often reveal inner beauty
So very true, and so very well said and written. I believe acceptance of self is the key to inner peace and becoming who you are meant to be. Very nice write, Zoe!
Women can be really confusing sometimes, and fail to see how amazing they are. Your poem speaks of and to more than a woman here. :)
Really beautiful... I especially like the second stanza.
The third stanza is OUTSTANDING! How fragile many women's confidence is! Nice work here.
Oh I so love this and you have said it so well.
Perfect. She is every woman.
Gorgeous: "until she becomes sheer colour"
Love these too:
"a complex web of contradictions"
"walk the fringe of an aurora"
~Shawna
rosemarymint.wordpress.com
So often we feel our worth lies in what others can see when our greatest value is what lies within...a beautiful poem!
Beautifully done, and oh, so true.
Kay, Alberta, Canada
It is always important to remember where the true secret lies, inside the human heart, each individual song and striving for self-awareness. What great meditation on this truth!
Love it.
the "complex web of contradictions", all the things we long for, dream of, fear... and the final 5 lines make this poem really special - echoing "if only..."
We have so much power and yet, we are still only in the past 40 years coming into our own. We never should have been seen as the little homemaker. We were created to be equals in everything.
I feel so sad for women who have no self esteem, they just don't know how powerful they are.
This is lovely.
I love how you wove it~ So much magic in your poetic voice!
Well Done :D
I do not know Cora Coralina yet... I know a little about you through your poem. I just fell for it.Zoe, you rock.
What a great message! Thank you. I'm going to check out the Garden too. I think this is my first visit to your blog - I'm going to follow you now. :o)
Cheers!
Beautifully introspective and thoughtful words!
This piece invokes the essence of womanhood very clearly. Thanks for sharing your work on Real Toads.
You are very right--it is so hard for women to feel good about the things that are part of them. Thanks for writing about it so eloquently. K.
Oh I so love this and you have said it so well.
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